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My first day at work is a
(the)
day I will never forget in my life. If S.O ask
(asks)
me how was your first day at work, I will answer that I
(was)
really happy to be at work on the first day.
It was
a day
7 years ago. (câu này hơi rườm rà bạn ạ, bạn có thể viết là It happened 7 years ago).)Previous night, I couldn’t sleep.
( I couldn’t sleep the Previous night).
.My head surrounded
(was surrounded)
by the imagines that I tried to imanige. I imagined everybody who I would meet and imagined what works I would do. Therefore, the next morning, I got up very early. Then I bathed, dressed my seft neatly and had breakfast. I began to go to my company. After completing some procedures, I was led to my office. Unlike I think, my manager was very handsome and kind. Everyone was friendly and willing to accept me. They helped me a lots. At 12 a.m, I had lunch with my colleagues. In the afternoon, I read documents. It was very helpful.
That was my first day at work. For me, it was indeep a memorable day.
----> bài của bạn có nhiều lỗi ngữ pháp quá, cách diễn đạt chưa được phong phú. Bạn dùng các từ lặp quá nhiều, và bài chưa thực sự sáng tạo. Bạn có thể bịa ra nữa mà ^^. Bạn viết lại bài này đi nhé!
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It was a day 7 years ago. (câu này hơi rườm rà bạn ạ, bạn có thể viết là It happened 7 years ago).)Previous night, I couldn’t sleep. ( I couldn’t sleep the Previous night). .My head surrounded (was surrounded) by the imagines that I tried to imanige. I imagined everybody who I would meet and imagined what works I would do. Therefore, the next morning, I got up very early. Then I bathed, dressed my seft neatly and had breakfast. I began to go to my company. After completing some procedures, I was led to my office. Unlike I think, my manager was very handsome and kind. Everyone was friendly and willing to accept me. They helped me a lots. At 12 a.m, I had lunch with my colleagues. In the afternoon, I read documents. It was very helpful.
That was my first day at work. For me, it was indeep a memorable day.
----> bài của bạn có nhiều lỗi ngữ pháp quá, cách diễn đạt chưa được phong phú. Bạn dùng các từ lặp quá nhiều, và bài chưa thực sự sáng tạo. Bạn có thể bịa ra nữa mà ^^. Bạn viết lại bài này đi nhé!